redrafting my poem, with thanks for your feedback
Redrafting my last few lines
But lies and Orwell's hate-vents spread like wildfire,
amass like tsunamis, "go viral",
screens powered by dark magic
that tech bros have enthralled us with
This seems a bit better but last line still problematic I think
tech wizards plotted to enthrall us
their dark magic powered our screens
inflamed our fears to spread like wildfire
How can we be calmed and healed? /
How can we calm and heal each other? /
What soft waters can heal our burns, calm our itch to fight?
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